In this story , cue for treason , Peter is faced with the desicion of running away from his problem or staying and being faced with consequences . Peter's parent's should have ran away with Peter during this situation , he is young and may not be able to live on his own . Running away from you're problems is never a good idea ! And everyone should know that . The author of Cue for Treason , may have made the desicion to make Peter run away alone just to add more excitment or to add more thrill to the story . Knowing that Peter is alone may make some people who are reading the story to think that Peter will get into alot of trouble with the law , or Peter may get lost and there create's a new problem .
If Peter's parent's came with him to run away they could of helped Peter alot . But , if they joined Peter , maybe he would not of had the opritunity to join the actor's he met along the way . Or met as many people as he did when he was traveling alone .
The message the author might be is trying to send is something about growing up . The quote "Live your life to the fullest." by Ernest Hemingway, seems to fit well with
this story . Peter has to leave his parents sometime and why not do it now ? Well no kid at the age like 15 would leave there parents because they will not be able to afford it . But Peter had to run away to keep his family safe . He met a whole lot of people and is acting with actors , he did pretty good for him self !
It is always better to face you're troubles . No matter what the problem is or how big it may be , you always have to face them right away before they get worse . An example would be " You can run but you can't hide ." Said by Joe Louis a famous weight lifter , in 1946 . The saying basically means you can run all you want but you will never be able to hide from you're problems . It still means that today , as it probably ment simular during the Elizabeth Era. Also , it is still saidby alot of people to this day .
Your posts are already showing improvement Marisa - more on topic, more formal tone, more confidence in your writing!
ReplyDeleteReminders: to review today's tips. For example will your readers know who Peter is in the first paragraph?
I like that you are including quotes in your support. Now I will make sure you can do so even better by integrating it into your writing -
weaker - An example would be " You can run but you can't hide ." Said by Joe Louis in 1946 .
stronger - Joe Louis, ball player (?) once said, "You can run but you can't hide." This was true during the Elizabethan era, Peter's time, in 1946, Joe's time, and today, out time.
Glad to see you did not get discouraged by the tech glitches and you are now starting to show improvement in your writing.
I just saw your comment to JohnJohn and I think you can do better - we reviewed the "constructive" sandwich today remember? be specific and remember the learning intention here is to develop your editing skills and ability to give constructive feedback.
ReplyDeleteOh alright ! :)
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